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I have now made the changes for the first part of the summary that [livejournal.com profile] peronel suggested as well as her general suggestions and also changed some of the things suggested by [livejournal.com profile] therru and this is how it looks now.
But I am not going to work today, really, promise!

Date: 2006-05-28 11:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] edmndclotworthy.livejournal.com
There are a couple of places where you have mixed your tenses in the opening chapters.

Thus, in the opening chapter which is written in the present tense, you have "The development over time is also described and a separate chapter dealt with..." - this should be "deals with". Later on, you have "...male fashionable dress shortened significantly, becoming knee-length during the 1340-1360s, and shortening even further ..." - the verbs "shortened" and "shortening" mix past tense with present continous - I suggest you change "shortening" to "shortened".

Also, in the paragraph that begins "Until the early fourteenth century", you have the phrase "the fifteen century" - this of course should read "the fifteenth century".

I must say though, that the quality is remarkable for someone who does not have English as their first language.

Date: 2006-05-28 12:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] frualeydis.livejournal.com
Thank you. I really should have proof read it another time before posting it, but believe me I'm very, very tired of everything that has to do with this book right now.

Eva

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